Friday Fictioneers Take One

This is the first time I’m trying one of these Friday Fictioneers photo prompts. The photo is below, and my piece is after that. The challenge is to get it down to 100 words, although it’s not required.

I don’t know what made me want to write it from first-person-plural, but it was a fun experiment. So it’s either a group hiding out, or Gollum…..

Copyright-Janet Webb


Genre: Science fiction, apocalyptic


Inside we wait for the explosions to stop.

Outside the sky is thick and gray with veins of red fire. But in here everything is pitch dark. We can barely see our hands as we reach for each other.

Last night she came. We had to ask her to leave. There’s no more room and not enough rations. When she wouldn’t, we had to make her. We try not to think about it now and hope that the war will stay out.

Finally the earth stills and we can uncover our ears. When we emerge, it’s all gone.

Word Count – 98


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22 Responses to Friday Fictioneers Take One

  1. deanabo says:

    I am so glad you decided to do this! Great post.


  2. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. You’ll find it lasts much longer than earth! 🙂



  3. Dear S.L.
    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. Quite a tale you’ve told.


  4. boomiebol says:

    Great story to start off your Friday Fictioneer journey :). Welcome to the family


  5. billgncs says:

    welcome — and that was a strong start. Lots of emotion and costs involved.


  6. It sounds reasonable that a group would be hiding out in this scenario . . . or maybe Gollum is hiding out, lol.

    I hope you enjoy the Friday Fictioneers! I like seeing how diverse the stories can be every week.


  7. tedstrutz says:

    Welcome to FriFic, SL. we had to make her… sad line, sad for all.


  8. Ankita says:

    Well done! 🙂


  9. yebuccaneer says:

    Oh dear.. apocalyptic..nice writing, just feel bad for ‘her’…!


  10. claireful says:

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. A very menacing story, with great atmosphere.


  11. S. L. says:

    Thanks everybody! I’m looking forward to these!


  12. How horrible that must be to make her leave.


  13. Scriptor Obscura says:

    Really chilling and creepy! Welcome! I’m a first timer myself. 🙂


  14. kz says:

    “We can barely see our hands as we reach for each other.” – liked that line. scenes that made me *shudder* they made her leave.. great story!
    PS welcome! you’re gonna love this writing exercise 🙂


  15. Sandra says:

    Welcome! And a great story for your debut too!


  16. Wow. Can’t find the words here. Such a great story.


  17. I cannot stop thinking about who she is… Got my mind spinning towards HG Wells.. and the crazy priest. Welcome to FF 🙂


  18. Joe Owens says:

    Welcome to the madhouse! It is good to have new players in our crazy arena. I like your approach to the prompt.


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